This is my contribution to this week’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers, brought to us by Priceless Joy.
Laura checked her watch. Where is he? He knows that I hate being late. She craned her neck over the edge of the platform.
“Excuse me, could you step behind the yellow line?” A uniformed man wearing an official tone and a whistle around his neck strolled over.
She turned around. “Uh.. sorry Mrs. Amazing, didn’t realize it was you… wow, never thought I’d see a superhero at a train station!”
“Well, Mr. Amazing chose not to fly today. And its Ms. not Mrs.” Her smile and her eyes gave him different messages.
He pulled out his phone. “Hey can I get a pic..er, never mind.” His survival instinct kicked in just as the train arrived.
Mr. Amazing stepped out and walked towards his wife.
“Sorry babe.” He shook his phone in her face. “Had to go back for this.”
“Where is it?”
“Where’s what?”
“The present?”
A look of panic washed over his face. “Oh shit. I left it on the train!”
Millbrae Station was reduced to a pile of rubble.
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Funny…I enjoyed it. I could picture the whole scene, and her response is priceless! Glad I wasn’t catching a train that day.😁
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thankyou! I had a lot of fun writing this one :p
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This is wonderful. The ending really ties it all together. Haha!. Ms. Amazing exploded. Very nicely done!
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Thanks Joy- great prompts inspire good stories 😉
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I’m glad this was a good prompt for you. 🙂
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Ha! I thought this was entertaining. I liked the title and the names of the characters. Apparently even superheros have to adhere to ‘happy wife, happy life.’ lol. 🙂 I know with the word constraint you need to use your words carefully, but the some places I wasn’t sure who was talking without dialogue tags. Funny story.
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thankyou – glad you liked it, and thanks for the feedback too – its good to know what works and what doesn’t 🙂
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This was very funny. Loved how the characters were superheroes and how Mr Amazing chose to take the train instead of flying. The man in uniform’s dialogue was great too.
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thanks Rachel 🙂 I had a lot of fun writing this one!
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Super heroes make for a good concept in the story. I think your piece is very imaginative and fun to read.
🙂
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Thanks Phylor- I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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I read this as humorous but now I think about it, any story in which celebrities have superpowers has to be classed as horror. The mess doesn’t bear thinking about.
Thanks for lightening my afternoon.
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Hadn’t thought of it that way but I suppose you’re right- superpowers and ego are a dangerous combination 🙂
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I can’t imagine mr amazing’s reactions on seeing his wife taking a picture with another man. Haha, the uniform man made a smart decision 🙂
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True- that would’ve been an interesting thing to witness!
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I love this story! So fun to read. 🙂
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Thanks! Glad you liked it 🙂
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I could picture everything.Enjoyed this.
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thankyou, I had fun writing this one 🙂
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Good. I will return to read some more.
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