Here’s my go at this week’s Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers prompt, with a photo provided by Graham.
The Feast
The Lady Orla sat watching her guests savour the delights laid out before them. Each table set with a sumptuous feast for the senses. Pink, juicy meats roasted to perfection, and oozing wheels of cheese served on pillows of soft warm bread. Exotic fruit from unknown places – and endless glasses of wine, glittering like liquid rubies in their hands.
She watched them eat and drink and laugh, listening to the clink of knives on plates made of gold, as her own plate sat untouched. Her slender, gloved hands resting softly in her lap.
She sat as the chatter grew quiet, and her guests feel asleep where they sat, waiting until the last hand dropped lifelessly against its owner before she moved. Her guests were arranged as she needed them to be, and only when they were ready did she bare her own hands.
The Lady Orla walked amongst her guests and caressed each one gently, pausing a moment to watch them turn slowly to gold.
165 words.
Very interesting! Turning her guests into gold. Is it her way of making money or keeping the moment forever? Wonderful story!
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Thankyou PJ! A bit of both I think- she likes to preserve the moment..
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Great story!
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I like this. The only part I’d remove would be the 2nd sentence and tighten the last.
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Thanks for reading, and for the feedback- good point re second sentence.,
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You’re welcome. If you get time, have a read of my stories @waltermoonblog I’d love to hear your feedback.
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I will!
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Wow! This is great!
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Thankyou so much!
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Great story! I am intrigued by the mysterious Lady Orla.
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Thankyou Kay! Orla is an Irish name with means golden (or golden princess), although I haven’t a lot of thought on who she may be..
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It sounded like a great dinner party until the guests all passed out. I was getting hungry reading the descriptions of the food. Don’t like that Lady Orla, though.
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Thankyou Deborah. Most of my writing tends to revolve around food- especially when written around dinner time!
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I liked this a lot. I liked that I heard myself reading out loud in my head as I read and I read in an exciting voice. I think that’s because the words pulled me right in. I also really liked that I thought it was going a completely different direction! Nice surprise!
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Thankyou! It was lovely of you to take the time out to read it and comment 😊
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Great twist on the King Midas myth.
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Thankyou! Appreciate your feedback 😊
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She’s a very strange person! And, I guess a very rich one! At least they all died happy. I enjoyed this unusual story. 🙂
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Thanks Jessie, she is indeed! I wasn’t quite sure how this was going to end to be honest, just went with it 😊
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Very creative, with the twist we all hankered for as children. Loved it.
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Thankyou! Lovely of you to visit and to comment
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What a dark twist. Lady Orla has the gold touch ha,ha 🙂
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Thanks Jacqueline! And thankyou for stopping by 😊
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My pleasure 🙂
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I thought she was going to poison them, but I didn’t expect her to go full Midas. I guess the moral is that when you think you’ve found a free lunch, you might end up being the price rather than paying it!
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Indeed.. There’s no such thing as a free lunch!
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Oh wow, Was definitely not expecting that. What a wonderful way you built up the story and suspense and then bam! With the ending.
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Beautifully written! I really enjoyed this piece, thank you for sharing it with us.
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Thankyou Nina, lovely of you to stop by!
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Haha! I love your imagination. At least, she fed them first! 😉
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Thankyou! 😀
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